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Post by neecheelok70 » April 29th, 2021, 7:21 am

I will listen this afternoon. Jim

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Post by neecheelok70 » April 29th, 2021, 11:01 am

Adrie, there are a few things amiss. The first two are deletions of text.

At 1:38, you have omitted "shrinking from the sight of her father and Lady Darnell."
At 8:54, omitted is "It was her husband's face" to "It was her son's face."

Both of these omissions need to be included in the text because they add to the meaning and emotion of the moment.

Then there are words that render the text somewhat illogical.

At 9:47, you say "unusual," instead of "usual."

At 15:24, "saw," but it should be "heard."

Otherwise, all is rendered well. Jim :)

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Post by AdriPrev » June 11th, 2021, 10:02 am

Apologies for the hiatus - I've been experiencing some burnout. I've uploaded chapter 7, and I'll upload chapter 8 soon.
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Post by neecheelok70 » June 12th, 2021, 6:29 am

Chapter 7 is fine. Fraught with confusion and anxiety! You are PL OK. Jim :)

P.S. You didn't mention corrections for Section 6. I assume you are going to fix and resend. Of course, there is no order. I just wondered. :hmm:

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Post by AdriPrev » June 13th, 2021, 4:07 pm

Chapter 8 uploaded.
Thanks for the reminder about chapter 6, I just uploaded the revised version.
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Post by neecheelok70 » June 13th, 2021, 8:28 pm

Thanks. I will see to it tomorrow. Jim :)

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Post by neecheelok70 » June 14th, 2021, 6:13 am

Section 6 is now PL OK. Thank you. Jim :thumbs:

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Post by neecheelok70 » June 14th, 2021, 6:34 am

And Section 8 is also PL OK. Interesting chapter! I would note that your outro length is more like six seconds than five. Just be careful not to go too long. Jim :)

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Post by AdriPrev » June 14th, 2021, 11:22 am

Chapter 9, 10 uploaded.
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Post by neecheelok70 » June 16th, 2021, 7:04 am

Chapter 9 is PL OK. The only problem I saw was that you created a new word. At 5:16, you say diminuation, instead of diminution. But it's close enough, I thought. :lol:

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Post by AdriPrev » June 16th, 2021, 7:38 am

Chapter 11 uploaded.
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Post by neecheelok70 » June 18th, 2021, 3:15 am

Chapter 10 is PL OK. Jim

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Post by neecheelok70 » June 18th, 2021, 4:42 am

PL OK for 11. But note Edinburgh is pronounced Edinborough. Jim :)

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Post by AdriPrev » June 20th, 2021, 8:10 am

Chapter 12 uploaded.
And thanks for the heads up on pronunciation!
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Post by AdriPrev » June 22nd, 2021, 12:15 pm

Chapter 13 uploaded.
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