OPEN[PLAY]Civil Service by Hare - thw

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Post by benderca » February 27th, 2021, 9:30 am

alanmapstone wrote:
February 24th, 2021, 9:44 am
Goldie Wex act 1

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/civilservice_goldiewex_1.mp3

Thanks to TJ for taking on the DPL role :clap:

I have used my usual attempted US accent here. Its probably not right for the Mid-West (more Beverley Hillbillies) but its the only one I can do :help:
You're very welcome! I love your Beverly Hillbillies accent, Alan! It's perfect for country boy, Goldie!
adrianstephens wrote:
February 24th, 2021, 11:59 am
I once read a piece in my "american" accent and was confidently identified as being Canadian.
That takes some courage!
Ha! :lol: :lol: :lol:

I will get to listening to all your parts ASAP! (No tomatoes please... :wink: ).

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Post by benderca » March 1st, 2021, 4:49 am

alanmapstone wrote:
February 24th, 2021, 9:44 am
Goldie Wex act 1

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/civilservice_goldiewex_1.mp3

Thanks to TJ for taking on the DPL role :clap:

I have used my usual attempted US accent here. Its probably not right for the Mid-West (more Beverley Hillbillies) but its the only one I can do :help:
:lol: I love your portrayal of Goldie, Alan! You had me laughing out loud! Nice -- Act 1 is PL OK!

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Post by benderca » March 1st, 2021, 4:58 am

AngeliqueAnja wrote:
February 22nd, 2021, 1:26 pm
benderca wrote:
February 22nd, 2021, 2:30 am
Thanks, Annie! Nice reading -- you're quite convincing as the beautiful flirt... :wink:
There were a couple of deviations from script in Act 1 that didn't change the meaning any, so I won't mention them.

I'll just point out this one word, which I also don't think changes the meaning and could be left as is:
0:50
It must be nearly time to open the postoffice, isn't it. Mr. Peavy? -- you say "reopen"

Todd? (You see, I'm a little nervous with all this power... :lol: ).

Here's the updated Act 1.
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/civilservice_octavia_1_128kb.mp3

If there are more errors or misspoken lines please do point them out. I'm happy to fix them :D
(You might become the DPL who's too nice if you don't pick on us! :wink:)

Annie

lol! Too true, Annie. If I start letting things slip by, the cast members may all become complacent and lazy, and walk all over me... :lol:

Octavia, Act 1, is now PL OK!

Thanks, Annie!

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Post by ToddHW » March 1st, 2021, 5:48 am

If I start letting things slip by, the cast members may all become complacent and lazy, and walk all over me...
And then things will be missing in final edit and you will Face the Wrath of Todd (aka Mr Marshmallow...)

Thanks, Todd

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Post by benderca » March 2nd, 2021, 4:50 pm

adrianstephens wrote:
February 25th, 2021, 11:47 am
Here we are:
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/civilservice_steveaudaine_1_128kb.mp3 15:10 @ 50%
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/civilservice_steveaudaine_2_128kb.mp3 4:43
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/civilservice_steveaudaine_3_128kb.mp3 3:48

It's certainly a change from esculent fish. Inspired by the indomitable Mr Mapstone, I may have committed a crime against good taste
in that I attempted an accent somewhere west of Ireland and east of Yakutsk.
So I had to look up Yakutsk on the map, and after having done so, I have to say you have hit the dialect (within that geographical range) perfectly! Nice work, Adrian. :lol:

Act 1 Notes:

MISSING LINE at about 0:54 (p.9):
STEVE (takes parcel from pocket). It isn't much. (Hands it to her.) I hope you'll wear it at your birthday party tonight.

MISSING LINE at about 3:16 (p. 13):
STEVE. I don't know what you're talking about.

EXTRA LINE at 4:51-4:55 (p. 14) -- you have recorded part of a line that belongs to Peavy:
It's just my little joking way. Can't you take a joke? (So please cut that section out).

MISSING LINE at 4:58 (p. 14):
STEVE. Well, don't joke about me. I'm not in the mood for jokes.

REPEATED LINE at 5:21 (p. 15):
STEVE. He's just driving in. (I think you meant to cut the first one out 5:21-5:24)

EXTRA WORDS at 6:44 (p. 20):
STEVE. I'll make a payment on the first of the month. Miss G. (cut out "Miss G." - that belongs to the next line).

MISSING LINE at 9:58 (p. 27):
STEVE. (startled). What is it? What do you want?

Thanks,
TJ


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Post by benderca » March 2nd, 2021, 5:21 pm

Shawn510 wrote:
February 25th, 2021, 7:59 am

Here, I fixed up the part about fixing:

https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/civilservice_postmaster_1_128kb.mp3 (7:16)

Thanks
The fixing is all fixed. Postmaster Act 1 is PL OK!
Thanks, Shawn!

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Post by benderca » March 2nd, 2021, 5:40 pm

Steve, Act 3, Notes:

REPEATED LINE at 2:15:
I am going to the Inspector.

MISSING LINE at 2:34 (p. 65):
ALL. Mrs. Jeffs!

Thanks,
TJ

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Post by Shawn510 » March 2nd, 2021, 8:11 pm


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Post by adrianstephens » March 3rd, 2021, 12:58 am

benderca wrote:
March 2nd, 2021, 4:50 pm

Act 1 Notes:
Uggg. That was a lot of errors. Sorry about that. Here's the correction (with new timings):
https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/civilservice_steveaudaine_1_128kb.mp3

0:55 MISSING LINE at about 0:54 (p.9):
STEVE (takes parcel from pocket). It isn't much. (Hands it to her.) I hope you'll wear it at your birthday party tonight.

3:29 MISSING LINE at about 3:16 (p. 13):
STEVE. I don't know what you're talking about.

5:07 EXTRA LINE at 4:51-4:55 (p. 14) -- you have recorded part of a line that belongs to Peavy:
It's just my little joking way. Can't you take a joke? (So please cut that section out).

5:10 MISSING LINE at 4:58 (p. 14):
STEVE. Well, don't joke about me. I'm not in the mood for jokes.

5:35 REPEATED LINE at 5:21 (p. 15):
STEVE. He's just driving in. (I think you meant to cut the first one out 5:21-5:24)

6:56 line replaced EXTRA WORDS at 6:44 (p. 20):
STEVE. I'll make a payment on the first of the month. Miss G. (cut out "Miss G." - that belongs to the next line).

10:11 MISSING LINE at 9:58 (p. 27):
STEVE. (startled). What is it? What do you want?

benderca wrote:
March 2nd, 2021, 5:40 pm
Steve, Act 3, Notes:

b]REPEATED LINE [/b]at 2:15:
I am going to the Inspector.

MISSING LINE at 2:34 (p. 65):
ALL. Mrs. Jeffs!
Corrections: https://librivox.org/uploads/toddhw/civilservice_steveaudaine_3_128kb.mp3

Thank you, TJ, for not falling on the floor laughing - or at least not doing it in public :)
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Post by ToddHW » March 3rd, 2021, 7:22 am

Thank you.

Todd



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Post by wib66 » March 5th, 2021, 2:39 pm

Can I read Miss Goldstein please

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Post by ToddHW » March 5th, 2021, 3:15 pm

Thank you.

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